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this is a cover letter for the volunteer position I have drafted up

i have decided to perhaps take a 1.5 month detour to volunteer in Nepal ( situated between India and China)

your constructive criticism would be deeply appreciated

Dear Whom It May Concern,
My name is Pauline Hoang and I am currently in my first year of a general science program at the University of Alberta; one of my many aspirations is to pursue a career in medicine.
Throughout high school, I have done a generous amount of volunteer work and participated in a variety of extracurricular activities. I was an active member of my school’s student council acting as the grade 12 representative. I was also a part of the “Green Team” which raised awareness about environmental issues throughout the school and the community. Moreover, I was on the swim, badminton, and cross county running team. In addition, I have gotten several scholarships for my superior academics achievements and accomplishments in volunteerism.
There are several reasons why I chose to volunteer abroad; one of the reasons being is that I love to travel so I decided to combine one of my hobbies with one of my passions – medicine. I strongly believe that volunteering abroad would provide an amazing educational opportunity for me to understand how different parts of the world deal with their health care system. The experience will expose me to foreign situations which will enable me to develop insight about the world, allowing me to become a more independent and knowledgeable individual.
I believe I am a well-qualified candidate for a volunteer placement because I possess many assets which are essential in an exceptional volunteer. I am an extremely hard working individual who will not refuse a challenge. Regardless of how simple or difficult, I always strive to do a task efficiently, effectively, and to the best of my abilities. I always preserve in any difficult situation. Also, I work well independently and with others. I am also reliable because I am always well prepared and on time. Lastly, I am passionate about what I do -- I am selfless and I strive to help in any way I can.
I am also knowledgeable about the health care field because I take part in several health care camps that allow me job shadow many professionals in the medical field; I am a member of the Pre-Med Association at the University of Alberta. I am currently a volunteer at the Canadian Diabetes Association and I have done a two year health internship at the Royal Alexandra Hospital.
Thank you for taking the time to consider me for a volunteer placement. If you have any future questions or concerns, please do not hesitate to contact me at not getting my phone number :) or email me at paulinehoang@hotmail.com.


Yours Truly,
Pauline Hoang


Thanks guys!